摘要:今天小賽挑選了一篇正在備考2023年中南大學(xué)博士入學(xué)的學(xué)員作文,希賽全職講師已經(jīng)對(duì)此進(jìn)行了精細(xì)點(diǎn)評(píng)。點(diǎn)評(píng)的批改內(nèi)容在下方,結(jié)合點(diǎn)評(píng)文本我們一起來學(xué)習(xí)一下。
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2023年中南大學(xué)考博英語寫作練習(xí)
今天小賽挑選了一篇正在備考2023年中南大學(xué)博士入學(xué)的學(xué)員作文,希賽全職講師已經(jīng)對(duì)此進(jìn)行了精細(xì)點(diǎn)評(píng)。
點(diǎn)評(píng)的批改內(nèi)容在下方,結(jié)合點(diǎn)評(píng)文本我們一起來學(xué)習(xí)一下。
點(diǎn)評(píng)文本2023·寫作精煉
學(xué)員作文展示及點(diǎn)評(píng)(備注:練習(xí)均要求手寫,本文為識(shí)別版,若有錯(cuò)誤,同學(xué)們及時(shí)指正)
Companys focus on work Experience
In recent years, more and more companys focus on work experience in recruitment, So it is necessary for gradnate stndents to gain work experience before graduation.
As a matter of fact, having work experience not only serves to hunt jobs but also help to enhance gradnates aspects of ability, such as the communication with others, the proper behaviour in sociery and the professional skills in practise. Besides, when they gradute from universities, They may be faced with many problems,and work having experience could help them to solve the setbacks more suitable. At the same time, as a job-seeker, if they have a abundent and excellent work experience, it is help(helpful) for them to getthe offers.
In my view, there are several advires how to manage to do work .Firstiy, they can join the studentunion when they in colleage, which help to excercise the behaviors and skills. For instance, they could learn writing skills in publicity department. Secodly, in the last ytar in colleage, the gradnate should fake a internships .In this carotion, they can enter an expected firm to wok, which can acclmuate work experienre and understand the work than before. Lust but not least, when they work in company, it is essential to work hard and stand on solid ground. To be exac they should devote themselves thorbiyhly to their work.
學(xué)員得分:約15-20分
講師點(diǎn)評(píng):總體觀點(diǎn)明確,邏輯清晰,卷面整潔,不錯(cuò)。不足之處有一些表達(dá)不夠正確,還有語法上面的小問題,需要多多細(xì)心,加油!
逐句點(diǎn)評(píng)
1. 修改前: companys
問題:拼寫不準(zhǔn)確
修改后:companies
2.修改前:but also help to enhance gradnates aspects of ability
問題:表述累贅
修改后:enhance abilities in various aspectssuch as...
3.修改前:They may be faced with many problems
問題:中式表達(dá)
修改后:這里可以直接用working experience
4.修改前:and work having experience could help them to solve the setbacks more suitable.
問題::中式表達(dá)
修改后:solve the setbacks more suitable,這個(gè)是指更好的解決不足嗎?英語中一被不這么用,可以說 in a more suitable way
5.修改前:there are several advires how to manage to do work .
問題:可以有更高分的表達(dá)
修改后:這里應(yīng)該不是to do work,應(yīng)該是gain experience before graduation哦!
6. 修改前:when they in colleage,
問題:用詞不符合文化使用環(huán)境
修改后:college更多的是指美國的一些??茖W(xué)院戰(zhàn)用university更合適一些
7. 修改前: thorbiyhly
問題:表述重復(fù)
修改后:dovote to 本身就有全身心投入的意思